Reading Journal 1 - TRADING PLACES
I'd like to assign the first reading journal task from the periodical Flight Training 03.12.
I'd like you write the story "Trading Places" from the father's point - of -view in 150-200 words. In other words, if the father in the story told what had happened that day, how would he do that?
You may want to begin with a sentence like this: "I was with my son in a rented Cessna 172 on a Friday night headed to Las Vegas..."
Your journals are due next Wednesday (March, 13).
Late journal entries will not be accepted. All journal entries should be done on the web. Pen-and-paper submissions will be returned.
Looking forward to reading the father's account of the story,
Have a great week!
M. Coban
In a dark Friday night,we were flying from California to Las Vegas.It was my first flight in a small aircraft.My son,Tommy,had taken his private pilot licence 1 month before our trip.Therefore,I was very proud of my son because of being in this journey.Suddenly,Tommy started to try some devices.He seemed very stressful.Aircraft's taillight became more and more dark.I was trying to be patient but in that situation nobody can calm down. The plane sauntering in the darkness.We finally decided to go back our starting point.Tommy was pretending to disguise the problem we had encountered,but I could feel he was really afraid of the landing.When we approching the airport our electrocity was completely drained. Tommy held the yoke carefully and stopped the engine to slow down.I noticed that Tommy was unexpectedly calm.The plane slowed down and silently touched the ground.My son succeeded this hard task by himself.This made me more stronger because of having such a talented boy.
YanıtlaSilSome good work Erk, but you should separate it into paragraphs and check the grammar for next time.
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YanıtlaSilIt was cold Friday night,I and my son were going to Lasvegas by Cessna 172 that he rented in a cheap price from my close friend.We just finished from doing some business in California. It was almost half on the way to our destination,the control panel light began dimming.It was not control panel that be trouble only but also radio.I could not hear any thing from the radio.the sound quietly down.I always realized that my son could solve it.I looked at my son.His face indicated me that he was very frightened. “What timid my son! Don’t worry” I said to him.I knew he just got private pilot certificate last week but the real situation was going to train him more.Although now he was not the best pilot,he could shown me a bravery.He decided to turn back to California. After that,it liked blessing from the God,radio went on working.He was enthusiastic to connect to the tower.After the plane landed to airport,I softly slapped to his shoulder and said “ You ! My son,you are the best”.
YanıtlaSilGood interpretation of the story. However you have quite a lot of grammar mistakes. Check that every sentence has a subject and a verb that agree with each other and use paragraphs to separate the main sections.
SilOn Friday night, I and my son was in a rented Cessna leaving for Las Vegas. We departed from Long Beach, California. It was about 45 minutes after taking off, I felt some strange things. I look out the airplane’s window and saw the instrument panel lights began dimming. I kept thinking positively as if there wasn’t a problem. Five minutes later, I listened my son trying to speak with the air traffic controller but he looked very frightened. It seemed there was not any response from the air traffic tower. The time was just about two weeks after getting his private pilot license so he did not have more experience in flight. However, I was sure that he could control this problems. He tried to use the airplane’s instruments to define the direction for going back to our departing place. I kept praying as long as the trip. Meanwhile, my son said that Long Beach Tower had known our coming. I didn’t believe until seeing a solid-green light in the direction of the airport tower even I didn’t know what it meant. I closed my eyes and felt the airplane touching the ground. Finally, we could land safely.
YanıtlaSilGood work, but to make it better use paragraphs and check your grammar.
SilI remember that day when the sun is not shining and it rains like caming down from glass. It was friday darkness when we were in Cessna and going to Las Vegas for gambling. My son insisted to fly the plane although he was inexperienced pilot. Well I trusted him and when the wind started to blow our plane away, I feared. I was scared but my son bravely used the Cessna and said:"I seen the worst". Then I realised that some of our devices got broken because of the static field. That was bad because it was dark and we cant see our way however my son used his lucky compass and found his way. When we landed I said :"My son I am proud of you." That night I was scared but also I trusted my son because I know he can do it. Also it has worth all the trip by itself.
YanıtlaSilYou've used a different interpretation and chaged some of the details, this is ok but try to keep close to the instructions. Check your grammar and use paragraphs.
SilDon't use translations of Turkish expressions.
Our trip started on Friday night with my son and Brad Bruno who is pal of my son. My son received private pilot licence a few week ago because of this reason my son had decided to rent an aircraft and my son rented a Cessna 172 as he said to me. and then we departed from Long Beach, California for going to Las Vegas. We were not even halfway to Las Vegas. Suddenly something wrong occurred in aircraft, my son very anxious and i could not help him because i don't have anything about aviation but i trusted my son i believed that he can do the best thing for our, by the way he tried to do something and then he decided to fly back to Long Beach, everyone were frustrated, i saw green light of Long Beach Runway 20 miles away after a while, our excitement increased more and more. Then my son landed runway clearly without trouble and we entered Long Beach Airport and i bought something to eat also my son made a phone call to long beach employees for thanking them. Then we hopped into my truck and we drove all all night to Las Vegas. This trip was one of the unforgettable time for me
YanıtlaSilGood work. Use paragraphs and check your grammar next time.
SilAs I remember, we were flying from Long Beach, California to Las Vegas with my son, Timothy, in a dark Friday night. Before our trip, he just had taken his PPL(Private Pilot Licence) one month ago. This was our first flight with a rented Cessna 172. For this reason, I was proud of my son due to the being in that voyage. Abruptly, something miscarriaged in the aircraft, and Timothy was so apprehensive. But unfortunately, I couldn’t give a hand him because I don’t know anything about an aircraft. In addition to these, aircraft’s taillight became more and more dark. Despite of the bad conditions, I relied on my son. On the other hand, Timothy launched to attempt some devices. After that Timothy made decision to fly back to take-off point. While landing I could see that Timothy was worrying about himself. My son landed on the airfield obviously. He seemed estranged from trouble. Later, we entered the Long Beach Airport and bought some foods to eat. On the other side, Timothy made a phone call to Long Beach workers to render. After all that I was very appreciate to have such a good son.
YanıtlaSilIt's not bad and you've used some good vocabulary but you need to take care of grammar. Try to use pragraphs next time.
SilI, my son's friend Jack and our pilot Brad Bruno who is my son. were flying from Long Beach,California on friday night,and we were going to go to Las Vegas.I bought newly Cessna 172 for my son because he had graduated from the pilot training school newly also.Let's turn back the trip.This trip was our first flight with this newly renting Cessna 172.During the trip I look at outside of the plane from window and I saw that there was a problem with taillight.I tried to be calm but it was not possible.My son also looked like very stressfull.For a little time I thought that i never buy the plane and we shouldnt fly because Brad was newly graduated and it seems unlogical.But i forgat this pessimistic thoughts.If you ask me where is Jack? I cant remember anything about Jack's situation.I remember just he was when we made a decision about where should we land.We all dealed to go back Long Beach.When we final approach to runway Brad realized the battery drained completely.I was afraid but I belive my son because I dont have another option.Finaly we landed and I started to pray.This trip was unforgettable for me.
YanıtlaSilYou've got the main ideas and events of the incident but you've confused the characters. Jack is the son and Brad the friend. It's generally ok but you should check your grammar and use paragraphs.
SilI was with my son and his friend Brad Bruno in a rented Cessna 172 on a Friday night, headed to Las Vegas. My son have just graduated from his Flight Training School, so he was flying the Cessna. We took off from Long Beach, California and was planning to go Las Vegas to see the city at night and the ropes at the casinos.. Cessna 172 is a 4 seated aircraft. There are two seats front for the pilots, and two seats behind for passengers. Since I was calling the shotgun, I got to sit in the front with my son. I did it on purpose, because I wanted to be close to my son.
YanıtlaSilAccording to my son, we were not even halfway to Las Vegas, looking at the taillights. Garmin 1000 which is the control panel in Cessna 172, has failed. I heard the ATC's voice became more distant and off-centre. After that, my son looked at me like he was asking for help. However, I have no knowledge about aviation. Therefore, I could not hide my fear, and I guess he noticed my nervousness on my face. I saw Brad was nervous as well. My son started to look at the switches on the left side of the control panel. He cycled one of the switches, but I appeared to be disappointed. I assumed that whatever he tried was not successful. He looked at nervously, again asking for an idea. He relieved us by saying that as long as the we had gas, the engine would continue to run. That was a relief, but I was still anxious, because of the failure of the Garmin 1000 and the other electrical equipments. We decided to go back to Long Beach. My son seemed like he knew what he was doing. We turned back and landed safely to the runway of Long Beach. I was very shocked that I couldn't even realize we were at the touchdown. I asked my son to correct the situation. We landed safely. I bought dinner for my son and Brad. My son called the ATC to thank them. Apparently, they helped us, even though we had a communication failure. I rely on my son after that day the incident.
Good work, the main ideas and events are there. However you should be careful with new vocabulary, if you're unsure how to use it you can check online or ask me. Look over your grammar before you post to see if you can see any mistakes.
SilI was with my son and his friend Brad in a rented Cessna 172 on a Friday night headed to Las Vegas.My son had a private pilot licence which was taken last week.While we were moving forward in air,there were some problems with ATC.My son tried to find solution.He strived to get plane 's condition better.I was too stressful but I tried not to be felt to him.He was also nervous.I smiled and get him cool.I was not be able to desist from thinking of troubling things.In the long run my son successed to touch down on the airport.I felt comforted when I heard the sound of rubbers on the asphalt way.This journey changed my mind about my son.
YanıtlaSilYou've understood the task and completed it. However it is quite short and you should check your grammar and vocabulary.
SilI was with my son and his pal in a rented Cessna 172 on a Friday night headed to Las Vegas. Before this journey,my son had graduated from flight school two weeks ago. This was our first flight with a rented Cessna 172.We took off from Long Beach,California for going to Las Vegas. When we were not even halfway to Las Vegas, something was wrong in Cessna 172. I was scared of this situation but my son settled down. He said that the control panel light of aircraft began dimming.I believed him because he was a succesful pilot. He could solve this problem. He tried to something and then he decided to turn back to Long Beach. He connected to the air traffic tower.We landed safely on the airfield. He was sweaty because of this problem. I was proud of my son because of solving the problem. Thereafter, he and I ate some foods. My son made call to workers to render and he complained them. This journey was unforgettable for us.
YanıtlaSilGenerally ok. You should try to paraphrase and not copy the material in the reading. I think you misunderstood the son's complaint.
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YanıtlaSilI was with my son in a rented Cessna 172 on a Friday night headed to Las Vegas. I was riding shotgun. We were not even halfway to Las Vegas suddenly; there was something wrong. I am not a pilot and I did not understand anything what was wrong in the plane. My son looked over to me for assistance, I was more nervous than my son. My son’s friend whose name is Brad began to move around nervously in the Cessna’s backseat and he poked his head up front, looking to hear some reassuring news. A forced smile on my face. I have no control, nothing substantial to offer to the situation. I had trusted my son for so long. There were no more things to do except trusting my son. I said ‘’is that it? We are on the ground? Yes, we were on the ground. My son said to me ‘’I had given him the power that evening’’ and I bought us something to eat. My son called Long Beach Tower thanking them for their help. I drove my truck all night to Las Vegas.
YanıtlaSilGenerally good, but you should make sure you're using the correct grammar for every sentence. You've misunderstood the 'trust' situation between father and son.
SilI,my son, and my pal Brad Bruno had a trip.It was sometimes good, but sometimes really bad.Now, I want to tell you that trip.We wanted to go to Las Vegas and my son rented a Cessna 172.We took off from Long Beach,Califarnio to go to Las Vegas on a Friday night by it.While taking off, I did not panic.The most bad thing was that there is not any person to control the plane other than my son.Also, my son had his private pilot certificate for a week and that flight was his first cross-country flight.That was so unlucky for us.After the taking off, everything was good until the sudden fault.Something was wrong.I was sure when I looked my son's face.He was sweating and I knew he was in trouble.I wanted to help him, but I could not do anything.Then, the electricty was cut off and inside of the plane was so dark.My son wanted to tell us something, but he could not do it.After the fault, he decided not to land on the nearest little strip of pavement and to fly back California.Then,I started to pray to land safely.We continued to fly without any problem and landed on the ground safely.I remembered that when I walked on the gound, I wanted to cry beacause of my happiness.Then, I thought I was right to trust my son.We did not give up, and got in my truck to go to Las Vegas.I was so tired, but I knew that I had to drive my truck to make happy my son.
YanıtlaSilYou've completed the task but with some problems. Brad is the son's friend not the father's and you don't need to write "I want to tell you about that trip". Check your grammar for errors.
SilMy son had got his private pilot certificate a week before. His pal Brad and I had decided to be with him in his first cross-country flight. Then we rented a Cessna 172. On a Friday night we had taken off from Long Beach to Las Vegas. Everything was ok, we were about the halfway to Las Vegas, and then we had encountered a problem. At first, the lights of the 172 began damning, then the plane became completely dark. I and Brad were getting nervous. But my son had told us that the engine will continue to run as long as we had gas. I asked myself why we started this trip when my son was fresh out of flight school. But that was it and I hoped to get on the ground safely. Then my son’s talk with ATC gave a result. We had sawn the green lights coming from the airport and that was good signal… Then it finished, we were on the ground. Then we had a dinner and I drove all night to Las Vegas.
YanıtlaSilGenerall well comleted, you've understood the relationships and events. I can be a little longer, take care using the past perfect tense.
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